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雅思写作7分句如何写

应对Nowadays, there are many television advertisements aimed at children.What are the effects of those advertisements on children?Should TV advertisements be controlled?这个题目。

学生在应答第二个问题的段落里有一句写到：

Therefore, boundaries should be drawn to guide or limit advertisements once children are involved.

看起来通顺的句子，其实关键问题有四：

1、 boundary搭配draw，其实不够合理不够符合用语习惯。

2、 句子的信息含量比较低，关键在于guide or limit advertisements处，欠缺一些关于广告的具体细节。

3、 once children are involved这个关于部分的含意不够明确：involve的意思是涉及，但是读者不明白“涉及”的具体内涵，是孩子出演广告（也是“涉及”到孩子），是孩子是广告的观众（也是“涉及”到孩子）？

4、 once的意思是“一旦”，用来引导本句的条件不合理。

如何修改后提分？

看下面

教师修改后的句子：

Therefore, boundaries should be set / lines should be drawn to regulate advertising, including what kind of slogans or graphics are acceptable, as well as what length or times of airing is inappropriate, if an advert is targeted at children.

句子分解：

1、 boundary和set搭配，或者draw 和line搭配。

2、 regulate advertising比原文的guide or limit advertisements是更令读者感到舒服的措辞。

3、 if an advert is targeted at children这个状语的引导词是if，这个宽泛的“如果”比原句的“一旦”合理。

4、 including what kind of slogans or graphics are acceptable, as well as what length or times of airing is inappropriate这一部分丰富了句子的信息，避免下文出现一个独立的句子去陈述这个内容，加快了写作的信息节奏。

总结：

1、 状语的引导词会影响状语的表意。于是，学习明确状语的引导词是（在确保句子在语法形式上无误之后）提升句子质量的关键之一。

2、 动词和宾语的搭配有语言习惯方面的讲究。

3、 可以通过句子的信息量的增加加快写作的行文节奏，避免行文拖沓。

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支招雅思小作文地图题——引入一个visitor （第三视角）：句型可以更多样、摆脱单调机械的“东南西北”表达、有些措辞和描述从而变容易、路线比方位更有“情境感。

《剑 14》Test 4

《剑 14》Test 4

高分范文及解析
The two maps, as they are put together, show how Grange Park now is different from it was in 1920.

In 1920, visitors could enter the park from either the Arnold Avenue entrance or the Eldon Street one and would see a fountain in the park’s center. West of the fountain was a musical stage, and on the north and south sides of the stage were rose gardens with seats in the vicinity. Visitors would see another rose garden in the east, by the Arnold Avenue entrance, a pond for aquatic plants in the northwestern corner, and a glasshouse by the Eldon Street entrance with seats nearby. [注意：“visitor视角”写法并不意味着抛弃描述方位，“第三视角”是“描述东南西北”的补充。]

[写出与历史情况的关键区别。注意：关键区别 (main features) 即可，无需面面俱到。] Now, the fountain is gone, and now there is a square rose garden with seats on its four sides. Second, the musical stage is upgraded to an amphitheater for concerts. In addition, visitors entering from Arnold Avenue will see a café and a children’s playground in the corner on their left, and if patrons enter from Eldon Street, they will see a water feature on their right. It is also notable that there is an underground car park near the water feature.

[地图的综述很好写，就写变化程度的大小] Clearly, the park has changedimmensely.

《剑 13》Test 1

《剑 13》Test 1

高分范文及解析
The two maps illustrate the changed [改造类地图的核心就是change] road access to a city hospital in 2010 compared with 2007.

In 2007, the hospital was in the loop created by the Ring Road and accessible only from Hospital Road, which had an intersection with City Road. A visitor should go north on Hospital Road to enter the building and would see a number of bus stops on both sides of the road. If the visitor arrived by car, the car should turn east at the northern end of Hospital Road and would find the car park on Ring Road. [写出“路线感”]

In 2010, a visitor could take basically the same pathway [描述了两个图之间的关系], despite the few major developments in front of the hospital building. A visitor, going north, would need to pass the roundabout to go on Hospital Road and see a bus station on the left as the replacement of the bus stops, and the car park on the right became only for the staff’s vehicles. Going down the road, there was another roundabout whose eastern exit, on Ring Road, led to the public car park on the east side of the hospital building. [写出“路线感”]

Overall, the change was marked.